i LOVE video games, i like showing off my body and i like flirting with guys. WHAT BETTER JOB THAN A BOOTH BABE? but… the question is HOW can i become one??? thanks.

go to A EA headquarter or another company

Like, I know it’s really jealous of me… but basically he went to this gaming conference thing (he’s part of a gaming news site), E3? Anyway, you know what these things are like, they have all these scantily clad girls walking around advertising the conferences…

So before he went I was like "hey, no booth babes ok?" and he was like yeah yeah sure.

Today I went on his friend’s album to see the pictures, totally innocently, just to see… and there were like ten pictures of him with his arms around them (like, on their butts), them kissing his cheeks etc.

I’m sorry, it’s really jealous… BUT it just makes me insecure because they’re like really gorgeous and stuff and it’s like, if he likes girls like that maybe he’s not attracted to me?? I bet he could have one of them if he wants… he’s really good looking… am I just being paranoid and stupid and have no right to be worried?

That’s the business he is in. Can you imagine him pushing a model’s lips away when she tries to kiss his cheek? Or refusing to hold them for a photo shoot? Unless there are other signs that he is unfaithful, the pictures alone cannot be evidence. Imagine having a male stripper boyfriend and you don’t want to see him naked in front of other women? I think it’s just work in this case. Don’t be jealous.

ive been experimenting with rhyme schemes

so i went for the first snare and inner/and for the second a multi

and switching the rhyme twice every bar

once ever i was shook,she had gold plated style
she left me star struck,with her sophisticated smile
got feelings in my heart,i thought id never feel
so i knew from the start,they were forever real
her voice hit more hyms,than a gospil school
her personality was firery,like a lite fossil fuel
she wanted to test me,but i kept rising above,
kill for my queen bee,with eyes of love
we were only fifthteen,but she gave me an ole date
and it was a dream,discovering my soul mate
my girls name is clare,and weve got threw tears
were not a perfect pair,but we are a few years
she thought me alot about been a better person
using ink in a dot in a letter without cursing
were both going to spain,for future sun brakes
cos were sick of rain,and killarnys fun lake

this letter is a message,to prove my worth
youve made my world better,youve moved my earth
i love your company and when we walk about
i love how you cant talk only shout
and we so comfortable we can sit in silence
so our mind dont dweel in fits of violence
but you can also be a pain in the @ss
but you still get me high like a bad strain of grass
but its hardly never to ocean the truth
so dont plan a lever motion with your booth
i be higher with trees ,than a yellow giraffe
looking at our memorys, with a mellow laugh
i know you very well and youd never greet a fling
my girl wont cheat, just aint her thing
everyday brings something new,and days are flying fast
so i stay true babe,to our joyous past

Yo, this is good, 8/10, but it got old about the 3rd time you reposted this. Try to write something else, I’m anxious to see what else you can rhyme.

once ever i was shook,she had gold plated style
she left me star struck,with her sophisticated smile
got feelings in my heart,i thought id never feel
so i knew from the start,they were forever real
her voice hit more hyms,than a gospil school
her personality was firery,like a lite fossil fuel
she wanted to test me,but i kept rising above,
kill for my queen bee,with eyes of love
we were only fifthteen,but she gave me an ole date
and it was a dream,discovering my soul mate
my girls name is clare,and weve got threw tears
were not a perfect pair,but we are a few years
she thought me alot about been a better person
using ink in a dot in a letter without cursing
were both going to spain,for future sun brakes
cos were sick of rain,and killarnys fun lake

this letter is a message,to prove my worth
youve made my world better,youve moved my earth
i love your company and when we walk about
i love how you cant talk only shout
and we so comfortable we can sit in silence
so our mind dont dweel in fits of violence
but you can also be a pain in the @ss
but you still get me high like a bad strain of grass
but its hardly never to ocean the truth
so dont plan a lever motion with your booth
i be higher with trees ,than a yellow giraffe
looking at our memorys, with a mellow laugh
i know you very well and youd never greet a fling
my girl wont cheat, just aint her thing
everyday brings something new,and days are flying fast
so i stay true babe,to our joyous past

Pretty Dope, 7/10.

Work on your spelling though!

once ever i was shook,she had gold plated style
she left me star struck,with her sophisticated smile
got feelings in my heart,i thought id never feel
so i knew from the start,they were forever real
her voice hit more hyms,than a gospil school
her personality was firery,like a lite fossil fuel
she wanted to test me,but i kept rising above,
kill for my queen bee,with eyes of love
we were only fifthteen,but she gave me an ole date
and it was a dream,discovering my soul mate
my girls name is clare,and weve got threw tears
were not a perfect pair,but we are a few years
she thought me alot about been a better person
using ink in a dot in a letter without cursing
were both going to spain,for future sun brakes
cos were sick of rain,and killarnys fun lake

this letter is a message,to prove my worth
youve made my world better,youve moved my earth
i love your company and when we walk about
i love how you cant talk only shout
and we so comfortable we can sit in silence
so our mind dont dweel in fits of violence
but you can also be a pain in the @ss
but you still get me high like a bad strain of grass
but its hardly never to ocean the truth
so dont plan a lever motion with your booth
i be higher with trees ,than a yellow giraffe
looking at our memorys, with a mellow laugh
i know you very well and youd never greet a fling
my girl wont cheat, just aint her thing
everyday brings something new,and days are flying fast
so i stay true babe,to our joyous past

8 out of 10 for someone inspiring to be a rapper.

ive been experimenting with rhyme schemes

so i went for the first snare and inner/and for the second a multi

and switching the rhyme twice every bar

once ever i was shook,she had gold plated style
she left me star struck,with her sophisticated smile
got feelings in my heart,i thought id never feel
so i knew from the start,they were forever real
her voice hit more hyms,than a gospil school
her personality was firery,like a lite fossil fuel
she wanted to test me,but i kept rising above,
kill for my queen bee,with eyes of love
we were only fifthteen,but she gave me an ole date
and it was a dream,discovering my soul mate
my girls name is clare,and weve got threw tears
were not a perfect pair,but we are a few years
she thought me alot about been a better person
using ink in a dot in a letter without cursing
were both going to spain,for future sun brakes
cos were sick of rain,and killarnys fun lake

this letter is a message,to prove my worth
youve made my world better,youve moved my earth
i love your company and when we walk about
i love how you cant talk only shout
and we so comfortable we can sit in silence
so our mind dont dweel in fits of violence
but you can also be a pain in the @ss
but you still get me high like a bad strain of grass
but its hardly never to ocean the truth
so dont plan a lever motion with your booth
i be higher with trees ,than a yellow giraffe
looking at our memorys, with a mellow laugh
i know you very well and youd never greet a fling
my girl wont cheat, just aint her thing
everyday brings something new,and days are flying fast
so i stay true babe,to our joyous past
their the same rhyme scheme

the second rhyme scheme flows better

once ever i was shook,she had gold plated style
she left me star struck,with her sophisticated smile
got feelings in my heart,i thought id never feel
so i knew from the start,they were forever real
her voice hit more hyms,than a gospil school
her personality was firery,like a lite fossil fuel
she wanted to test me,but i kept rising above,
kill for my queen bee,with eyes of love
we were only fifthteen,but she gave me an ole date
and it was a dream,discovering my soul mate
my girls name is clare,and weve got threw tears
were not a perfect pair,but we are a few years
she thought me alot about been a better person
using ink in a dot in a letter without cursing
were both going to spain,for future sun brakes
cos were sick of rain,and killarnys fun lake

this letter is a message,to prove my worth
youve made my world better,youve moved my earth
i love your company and when we walk about
i love how you cant talk only shout
and we so comfortable we can sit in silence
so our mind dont dweel in fits of violence
but you can also be a pain in the @ss
but you still get me high like a bad strain of grass
but its hardly never to ocean the truth
so dont plan a lever motion with your booth
i be higher with trees ,than a yellow giraffe
looking at our memorys, with a mellow laugh
i know you very well and youd never greet a fling
my girl wont cheat, just aint her thing
everyday brings something new,and days are flying fast
so i stay true babe,to our joyous past

Im diggin the 2nd verse more.

once ever i was shook,she had gold plated style
she left me star struck,with her sophisticated smile
got feelings in my heart,i thought id never feel
so i knew from the start,they were forever real
her voice hit more hyms,than a gospil school
her personality was firery,like a lite fossil fuel
she wanted to test me,but i kept rising above,
kill for my queen bee,with eyes of love
we were only fifthteen,but she gave me an ole date
and it was a dream,discovering my soul mate
my girls name is clare,and weve got threw tears
were not a perfect pair,but we are a few years
she thought me alot about been a better person
using ink in a dot in a letter without cursing
were both going to spain,for future sun brakes
cos were sick of rain,and killarnys fun lake

this letter is a message,to prove my worth
youve made my world better,youve moved my earth
i love your company and when we walk about
i love how you cant talk only shout
and we so comfortable we can sit in silence
so our mind dont dweel in fits of violence
but you can also be a pain in the @ss
but you still get me high like a bad strain of grass
but its hardly never to ocean the truth
so dont plan a lever motion with your booth
i be higher with trees ,than a yellow giraffe
looking at our memorys, with a mellow laugh
i know you very well and youd never greet a fling
my girl wont cheat, just aint her thing
everyday brings something new,and days are flying fast
so i stay true babe,to our joyous past

7/5 out of 10

once ever i was shook,she had gold plated style
she left me star struck,with her sophisticated smile
got feelings in my heart,i thought id never feel
so i knew from the start,they were forever real
her voice hit more hyms,than a gospil school
her personality was firery,like a lite fossil fuel
she wanted to test me,but i kept rising above,
kill for my queen bee,with eyes of love
we were only fifthteen,but she gave me an ole date
and it was a dream,discovering my soul mate
my girls name is clare,and weve got threw tears
were not a perfect pair,but we are a few years
she thought me alot about been a better person
using ink in a dot in a letter without cursing
were both going to spain,for future sun brakes
cos were sick of rain,and killarnys fun lake

this letter is a message,to prove my worth
youve made my world better,youve moved my earth
i love your company and when we walk about
i love how you cant talk only shout
and we so comfortable we can sit in silence
so our mind dont dweel in fits of violence
but you can also be a pain in the @ss
but you still get me high like a bad strain of grass
but its hardly never to ocean the truth
so dont plan a lever motion with your booth
i be higher with trees ,than a yellow giraffe
looking at our memorys, with a mellow laugh
i know you very well and youd never greet a fling
my girl wont cheat, just aint her thing
everyday brings something new,and days are flying fast
so i stay true babe,to our joyous past

Rap is something you do while Hip Hop is our culture. This song is classified as Hip Hop. We live it. It’s more along the lines of mid school LL Cool J and Nas. I personally like it because it doesn’t sound too soft or weak. I don’t like the Chris Brown crying all the time type of guy/song. This song sounds strong, truthful, it paints a picture and the person you wrote it about will be happy.

A word of advice. Never put your lyrics online like this. Especially if you plan on pursuing a career in music. I wouldn’t be surprised if we heard a line or two from someone in about 10 years. When you hear your music on the radio and realize you are not being paid for you will understand what I’m talking about. African Americans went thru this years ago don’t repeat that part of the past.

once ever i was shook,she had gold plated style
she left me star struck,with her sophisticated smile
got feelings in my heart,i thought id never feel
so i knew from the start,they were forever real
her voice hit more hyms,than a gospil school
her personality was firery,like a lite fossil fuel
she wanted to test me,but i kept rising above,
kill for my queen bee,with eyes of love
we were only fifthteen,but she gave me an ole date
and it was a dream,discovering my soul mate
my girls name is clare,and weve got threw tears
were not a perfect pair,but we are a few years
she thought me alot about been a better person
using ink in a dot in a letter without cursing
were both going to spain,for future sun brakes
cos were sick of rain,and killarnys fun lake

this letter is a message,to prove my worth
youve made my world better,youve moved my earth
i love your company and when we walk about
i love how you cant talk only shout
and we so comfortable we can sit in silence
so our mind dont dweel in fits of violence
but you can also be a pain in the @ss
but you still get me high like a bad strain of grass
but its hardly never to ocean the truth
so dont plan a lever motion with your booth
i be higher with trees ,than a yellow giraffe
looking at our memorys, with a mellow laugh
i know you very well and youd never greet a fling
my girl wont cheat, just aint her thing
everyday brings something new,and days are flying fast
so i stay true babe,to our joyous past

really good acually..
feels like i can relate to this
9/10